Poetry By Chuck

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I wish I could talk to her tonight.
I wish I could tell her how much I love her.
I wish I could ask her forgiveness,
For all the mean things I've ever said to her.


If I could I would change places with him.
If I could I would bring him home right now.
If I could I would be there with him.
If I could I would no matter how.

When I think of her I think of our life.
I think of her eyes so bright.
I think of her and the wondrous nights.
I think of her and wish she would write!!


I pressed every clothing item he left.
I cleaned the entire house,
Even his garage, many times.
There is nothing left.

I thought I saw her face today.
It was a soldier who was turning away.
She looks like her in so many ways.
I wish I could see her face tonight.


My folks called. They wanted to know,
"Is he alright?"
Sometimes the mere thought of him there,
Just gets me uptight.

I wrote a letter to her today.
I sent it but now think I should not have.
Too many descriptive things in it.
Too many.. I should have kept to myself.


I got a letter today.
I am so in love.
He writes almost every day.
Let's see what he has to say....

I got a letter today.
God, that picture she sent.
I love that gal so much.
She is heaven sent.
 
I got a visit today.
They said he died bravely....
 

Author notes

Thoughts of you.  First his then hers.
Written September 10th, 2004


  • LiquidEmotion15
    September 11, 2004

    good job

    i luv the way u wrote this its really good keep it up and if your bored comment on one of mine id sure appreciate it
    luv always and god bless
    amy

  • Mozaic
    September 11, 2004
    young love is always a welcomed and very satisfying event in someone's life. It is a sign of a new beginning, a fresh start or simply a refreshing change that's been long awaited...may this feeling last forvever...and ever...and ever!
     Mozaic

  • MagicLady silver member
    September 11, 2004
    Chuck,
    Been there, done that...
    I started to read and the tears flooded my eyes. So many memories of those times when he was away. Most of the time I don't mind being "married" to the air force, but there are times when I just despise it. I know you understand. Being less than a year from retirement, I am both anxious and afraid.

    Cheryl 

  • Touchof1der Moderators member
    September 11, 2004
    I think this is one of the best pieces you have written here on AP Chuck...This is really very special and I'm pleased you have chosen to write another entry for my contest. Good luck!

  • Chuck Johnson silver member
    September 11, 2004
    Of course you can. Print as you like. I wrote this for you. I'm proud you liked it.
  • Catressa gold member
    September 11, 2004
    Awww Chuck This is soooooo Moving I love the two of us. And I thought of that song, this might sound trite but Get Here By Oleta Adams, have you ever heard it? Sniff Sniff okay this stuff is doing it's job.. Making me all mushy now awww damn I hate to cry.. Thank You My Sweet Friend, this was so beautiful and I will Print it if it is okay with you? Take Care and Be Safe, Cat
  • Kathyarin
    September 11, 2004

    very sweet

    I usually don't like sappy love poems, but this is touching and tender. A beautiful tribute Catressa. I hope you do well in the contest, but I know the greater goal is to offer comfort and support to your friend, which you've surely succeeded in.

  • PistolServce
    September 11, 2004
    Hey man this is AWESOME! this is definitely going on one of my favorites too! 

    WEll, as everyone else said, i loved your creativity and how you wrote it from both points of view.. even though it didn't rhyme it was just PERFECT!

    Great job!

    - undisc0vered
  • RainbowQueen
    September 10, 2004
    Fantastic write. I loved the way you did this. Almost feel like I was listening in on private thoughts...
  • Rambler
    September 10, 2004
    If this isn't a cup of comfort for Catressa I don't know what is. This is going to be a hard one to beat. Whoever wants to do better will really have to apply themselves.

  • Trellis
    September 10, 2004

    Bravo!

    Beautiful poem! You did an excellent job on this!

  • Annastacia
    September 10, 2004
    I really like this, I love the way this is written. I am going to mark it as one of my favorites.
    Anna

  • Come L-oro
    September 10, 2004
    i know whats its like to have only thoughts of someoene your love so much and it really hurts, i like this poem alot because i can relate to most of it and i liked the scheme you used. keep it up with all the good stuff, keep smiling for the camera and keep on keepin' on......b3l
  • Ladybug1962
    September 10, 2004 
    OK, I was going to enter this contest now I am SCARED! This was a wonderful poem! Truly awesome idea to have one then the other (it was so well done I knew thats what you were doing before I got to your comment). You did a great job!
  • SophiesCorner
    September 10, 2004
    this poem is very unique. i had to read it twice (not the sharpest tool in the shed)...but once i got it, or at least i felt like i got it, it made so much sense and was written beautifully. this poem shows so much imagination...and a real power of love, even in it's simplicity. great write! keep up the good work!
  • clear
    September 10, 2004 
    wow this is good! writin a poem in both the guy and girls view..this is good...its really romantic..well nwiez t/c
  • Nicole Hanna
    September 10, 2004
    How incredibily original, to write a poem from both points of view. And how touching to boot. This one is probably my favorite in the contest by far, simply because of it's creativity. It was extremely touching.
  • run hippie run
    September 10, 2004
    whoa!!! i love this...it reminds me of one i wrote awhile back...i really love when you get two point of views in poems... this was a really good storey too!!! o man i lvoe this!!! truely awsome and oh man i love it!!!!
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