The silence of serenity and the echoing sound it makes,
across distances so lovely, vast empty landscapes.
A sound that carries a caress of wind and dust in its taste,
singing a portrait of sun and clouds the lands dappled face.
A mellow mood and a memories pleasant face.
The silence of the mind and the echoing sound it makes.
Across distances so lonely dispite bleak landscapes,
comes the singing spirit of a loved ones gentle embrace.
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When we are far from our loved ones.
Comments from Professional Poets
|ChrisRobin on Jan 05, 2004, 8:05 p.m. |
Leaving little footprints in hearts 2682 critiques, 0 poems.
This one paints a million possible images in my mnd, the imagery used in descriptions is vivid, truly magical and creative indeed.
A wonderful post indeed, albeit short it truly hits home to me as a reader.
|becoming human on Jan 05, 2004, 10:12 p.m. |
it's the FINAL countdown...do da doo doo 3375 critiques, 197 poems.
Lovely piece of art. Very upbeat and almost surreal... thanks for sharing it!~
| Chuck Johnson on Jan 05, 2004, 10:18 p.m. |
Just fade away. 574 critiques, 151 poems. Currently online.
Thanks for all your wonderful comments. I'm not deserving.
| Desire on Jan 05, 2004, 10:58 p.m. |
~The Power Within YOU is Endless~ 7877 critiques, 1083 poems.
So close yet so far away
Words of love make my day
Hearing the syllables pass the lips
Feeling the warmth from a gentle kiss
Knowing that special person is out there
Showing that same person how much you care
~Loved ones are priceless gems~Awesome piece my dear and welcome to AP~Have much fun and enjoyed this write very much~Thank you for gracing my page~Keep on writing and inspiring~Big hugs and much love~Desire
| Hoosierpoet on Jan 19, 2004, 9:38 p.m. |
Poetry is the music of the heart 1957 critiques, 238 poems.
Verdict: very good
Superb writing, Chuck. I love nature poems, especially the short ones that are so full of meaning and imagery. This one did not let me down.
| genielassie on May 28, 2004, 3:31 p.m. |
What is the weight of a solitary word? 5443 critiques, 185 poems.
A stunning work! You have made these lines flow very well and your useof rhyme is fabulous as well. I love nature poems of all sorts and thisis a wonderfully refreshing write! Best of wishes... ~genielassie~
|forgotten dream on May 28, 2004, 10:38 p.m. |
i carry your heart with me(i carry it in my heart) 2346 critiques, 102 poems.
what a great piece! this whole poem flowed very well, and the rhyme was wonderful. i loved the vivid imagery, and the feelings it evoked in me while reading. great work <33
|Pessimistic Optimism on May 28, 2004, 10:44 p.m. |
pretty petite ***** from asia gets pearl necklace 501 critiques, 46 poems.
so soft and gentle and that picture ties in so well with the serene longing expressed within it. usually i steer clear of rhyming poems, but your imagery and detail exceeds beyond rhyme and still carries meaning within the lines instead of fitting some set form that it makes it all the more enjoyable to read. wonderfully written. keep it up
xo Pessimistic Optimism
|ihatepink23 on May 28, 2004, 10:44 p.m. |
when it rains... it pours 846 critiques, 20 poems.
great job! i enjoyed reading this- short and sweet. this poem flowed very nicely, and the rhyming was good also. It created a nice pic for me... thanx for sharing
|Ladybug on Jul 03, 2004, 3:23 p.m. |
the choice of life bitter or better! now choose 6685 critiques, 199 poems.
the silence of serenity, says it all for me....
a golden beauty!
|gundo04 on Feb 05, 2005, 2:30 p.m. |
0 critiques, 0 poems.
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